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i'm cooking the veggies and valuing myself! ([personal profile] themeletor) wrote2005-10-17 12:14 am

oh god oh god oh god

I think I may have just written the UGLIEST SENTENCE EVER.
changes right in the middle to the passive voice and everything.



I don't know whether to be morbidly impressed, or TO VOMIT.

hopefully the rest of this fic will make up for it.

[identity profile] ima-pseudonym.livejournal.com 2005-10-16 10:01 pm (UTC)(link)
Oooh! What was the sentence? *fully expects it to kick the crap out of the best of my sentences*

[identity profile] meletor-et-al.livejournal.com 2005-10-16 10:16 pm (UTC)(link)
I hacked it up and changed it and NOW YOU CAN'T SEE IT HAH.

...butitwasprettydamnedawful.

[identity profile] ima-pseudonym.livejournal.com 2005-10-16 10:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Waaa!

[identity profile] elessil.livejournal.com 2005-10-17 01:09 am (UTC)(link)
What's up with you English-speaking fellows that your language sucks so much that you hate entire shapes it takes on, such as passive voice?

I mean, dude. They should've thought better when creating it than balking at using it later.

[identity profile] meletor-et-al.livejournal.com 2005-10-17 01:15 am (UTC)(link)
you have a point there. I mean, in Spanish? totally cool with the passive voice. I don't know what it is that makes it so much worse in Englis, but apparently the writers of encyclopedias, textbooks, and politicians' speeches get exemptions.

...it just causes a word tangle, most of the time. especially in fiction. and also muchly weakens the sentence, almost all of the time. ESPECIALLY in fiction.

[identity profile] elessil.livejournal.com 2005-10-17 12:46 pm (UTC)(link)
Germans are also totally cool with the German passive voice.

Only the English despise it.

'tis odd, to say the least. If it never worked the way it is supposed to, change it?

[identity profile] wormmonabc.livejournal.com 2005-10-17 04:24 am (UTC)(link)
Vomit while being morbidly impressed. Me, I'm laughing my ass off.
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[identity profile] wormmonabc.livejournal.com 2005-10-17 05:07 pm (UTC)(link)
You got it, babe.

[ /makes ass of self ]

[identity profile] meletor-et-al.livejournal.com 2005-10-17 05:45 am (UTC)(link)
Bitch.

( <3 )

Re: [ /makes ass of self ]

[identity profile] wormmonabc.livejournal.com 2005-10-17 05:07 pm (UTC)(link)
THE bitch. Thank yew.